徵文比賽
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katharina replied at 2012-10-13 10:33 pm
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ya..enjoying now ...waiting to cum. :D
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高潮快到??
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katharina,
明天可否一起去午餐
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MAsss, both.
四哥, in progress.
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erica56 replied at 2012-10-13 3:09 pm
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middleman replied at 2012-10-13 3:06 pm
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BOOK定酒店同妳做足 3小時, 做完就寫埋篇文章, 妳就不收錢, 咁都公平吧??
ADD ME PLS
[email protected]
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唔明你個logic
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呢條柒頭淨係識搵女TRADE
唔撚使理9佢架, 死撚一條而已
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Masss, i am shaking my head. :D
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MuscularAsss replied at 2012-10-13 10:32 pm
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katharina,
可否明天去游水?
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Can I join ?
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katharina,
in progress, LOL......
i'd answer my friend "i am in the progress of reaching a climax" next time when i am diying
what do you mean by shaking head? to refuse brother masss' request?
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Does it really have to be in chinese?
I am not really good with typing
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i take that as a yes
katharina replied at 2012-10-13 10:42 pm
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Masss, i am shaking my head. :D
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四哥, tks for teaching, i know what i tell you next time when i'm diying.
MAsss, you have someone date you to swim tmr, dun miss it.
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i go to diy, ttul. :D
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Everybody, Delay No More, fxxk You.
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katharina
it may be more fun to stay and chat with us while diy-ing
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katharina replied at 2012-10-13 10:26 pm
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Kevin,
我唔悶,係屋企嘆緊世界. :D
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點嘆法? 有人服侍你? :D
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四哥, if i diying, i can't chat, if i chat, i can diy.
you can? kekeke
kevin, if 有人服侍, then no need diy la.
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if i chat, i can't diy.
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katharina replied at 2012-10-13 11:21 pm
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四哥, if i diying, i can't chat, if i chat, i can diy.
you can? kekeke
kevin, if 有人服侍, then no need diy la.
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i am sorry to hear that you need to diy instead of finding one of she guys (including me, he..he.) to help you. Are all she guys bad enough to let you down?
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katharina replied at 2012-10-13 11:21 pm
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四哥, if i diying, i can't chat, if i chat, i can diy.
you can? kekeke
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oh, you finished your session already??
actually i can't do that too, but i enjoy moaning to a gal(and listening to moaning) while having the pleasure flow over my body.
not to mention it is so sexy to let her know i am cumming
i can almost feel like shooting inside her moist private part
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Erica, I will hold your hand and bring you go
to bathroom. Took off your dresses. Let you lay down
into warm water. Use my hands smooth moving on your
body. From head to tooth every inch will careful to
clean it. Every inch I will use my tongue to
lick it. Use my lips to kiss on your three
points. My finger will like a spider climbing on mountain.
On your nipples and bit it. And I will let
you hold my stick. Let you feel it how strong
and how hard it is. Until the three hours finished.
(100 words)
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From head to tooth every inch will careful to
clean it
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你幫佢刷牙?
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佢下面都有牙嘛. HAHAHAHA
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3 hours.....that's not enough time to get my pen up.....for a good romantic poem.....
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If I were guy I think will start at: It come what it comes, is it need an essay? But......
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Erica,
I would like to participate the competition.
"If I have three hours with Erica, I will explore her secret little heart with my warm sweet blood, sneak a look at her eyes with my shy pupils and take a breath of her fragrance to memorize in my nose. I will be holding her hand walking on sand of a silent beach, rounding her back looking at sunset my warmth ignites her spirit. Listening to breeze touch with my finger tips to unfreeze her lonely heart. Kissing her lips reaching her deep to heal the soul. A moment of day will stay with her for days the magic three hours of romance!"
Hope you enjoy it...
[email protected]
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jj replied at 2012-10-13 10:26 pm
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噔噔噔噔。。。。主角去左邊。。
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答左你先
星期六梗係有節目啦 ：p
點會吽喺forum度？
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Kort replied at 2012-10-13 3:22 pm
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詳細呀...
我好耐無係度寫文喇其實~hahaha
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好耐無，即係以前有
有與趣就投稿啦
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hotsexskill replied at 2012-10-13 4:43 pm
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erica56原來唔祗腳仔靚,身才仲咁冊豐滿咁fit,想引死晒d She男咩.
我又要投稿,erica56咁索得3個鍾咁小唔夠喉喎.
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見三個鐘唔夠咪再約多次囉
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戰狂300 replied at 2012-10-13 5:22 pm
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我會牽著她的手,漫步黃 10
昏下,細聽海風,凝望她在 20
晚霞中嫣紅的面頰,當與 30
她四目交投時,她的紅唇 40
就像千年磁石一樣,把我 50
的唇都吸了過去,深深的 60
緊緊的,吻著,吻著,星月的 70
飛渡,也不能喚回我的靈 80
魂,我倆完全迷醉於熱吻 90
之中,直至噹的一聲玲聲 100
三小時完了
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評語：內容充實，創意一般，注意標點符號和別字
38+18+7+5=68
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戰狂300 replied at 2012-10-13 5:47 pm
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吾闖天下,得見美人,血脈沸騰,金槍直挺,昂首暴現;
猛撲擒嬌,卸甲碎衣,片片破紗,晶瑩白玉,滑不溜手.
狂龍尋洞,直搗玉門,嬌軀亂擺,腰動如蛇,浪叫迴天,
虎步熊腰,進退千回,龜騰鳳翔,兔吮魚遊,激戰連連,
嬌喘無力,騰龍吐洩,八肢相纏,兩體不分,共入夢去......
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評語：內容尚可、格式清新
33+22+7+8=70
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jj replied at 2012-10-13 7:04 pm
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Erica 算石屎版最鬼馬個個。
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過獎了
我一心想為大家帶來歡樂，為生活添姿彩
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LovelyMandy replied at 2012-10-13 7:02 pm
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徵文比賽都幾有創意喎
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你有無興趣參加？
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cristovao replied at 2012-10-13 6:58 pm
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其實可以去下海洋公園HELLOWEEN玩返3個鐘都係一個不錯的選擇，玩下同俾人嚇下吾駛咁駒緊，大家又可以放D(最多嚇到成晚訓吾到)，玩完先去食野休息下，吾錯吾錯
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字數不足
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MuscularAsss replied at 2012-10-13 9:31 pm
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假如我和Erica有三小時，我會叫佢同我按摩一小時, 打飛機一小時, 吹55分鐘, 吊5分鐘
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字數不足
重作
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版主， 請問有無貼士可以俾大家參考下呀。
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我又應徵
先旨聲明,純抄襲,非二次創作
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喉嚨很乾 所以愛上你的吻
咀巴需要覺得 像被誰期侍過
纏綿很好 所以愛上你胸襟
體溫需要記得 亦被承受過
為誰亦能動心 請不要笑我太低等
熱情自然亮燈 渴望難自禁
味蕾覓尋肉身 比一隻野獸更天真
問誰又能硬撼 肉體吸引
讓美色 給感官體諒 過程其實極漂亮
難道你在訓練我 不需要情慾對象
熱吻間 勾起的想像 愛情其實是這樣
期望你 亦要為身體著想
***
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thehelp replied at 2012-10-13 9:57 pm
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erica56 replied at 2012-10-13 3:08 pm
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erica56 replied at 2012-10-13 3:06 pm
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jj replied at 2012-10-13 3:02 pm
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由長腳變胸圍。。正！ERICA，你越來越正。
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你錯啦
係不嬲咁正 lol
保證真相，唔係偷返黎ge
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內衣相好正呀...^^
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Thanks
我打算下次換相換長腿黑絲
你話好唔好？
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hotsexskill replied at 2012-10-13 10:15 pm
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我會同erica56先燭光晚餐飲少少酒聽浪漫音樂,最少都要1個鐘,又一齊睇4仔調情.攬下錫下, kiss,錫耳仔,粉頸慢慢撫摸對34C,啜lin lin.......前戲又要成個鐘啦,戲肉由溫柔至激情,狂野淫亂......下刪一千字.冇一個鐘以上邊夠用喎,仲話想執多2劑都好難.
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評語：可以約五十字補充「下刪一千字」之內容，注意標點符號
32+19+6+6=63
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if i have 3 hours with erica, i'd prefer to hold her hands and hug to sleep.
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insider replied at 2012-10-13 10:40 pm
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erica56 replied at 2012-10-13 3:09 pm
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middleman replied at 2012-10-13 3:06 pm
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BOOK定酒店同妳做足 3小時, 做完就寫埋篇文章, 妳就不收錢, 咁都公平吧??
ADD ME PLS
[email protected]
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唔明你個logic
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呢條柒頭淨係識搵女TRADE
唔撚使理9佢架, 死撚一條而已
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過門都係客
我回應佢係基本禮貌
多謝提點
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戰狂300 replied at 2012-10-13 11:47 pm
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Erica, I will hold your hand and bring you go
to bathroom. Took off your dresses. Let you lay down
into warm water. Use my hands smooth moving on your
body. From head to tooth every inch will careful to
clean it. Every inch I will use my tongue to
lick it. Use my lips to kiss on your three
points. My finger will like a spider climbing on mountain.
On your nipples and bit it. And I will let
you hold my stick. Let you feel it how strong
and how hard it is. Until the three hours finished.
(100 words)
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Comments: Our first entry in English. Bravo! However, you should pay attention to the SVO structure and tenses.
33+20+4+6=63
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A_Man_and_A_Pen replied at 2012-10-14 12:01 am
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3 hours.....that's not enough time to get my pen up.....for a good romantic poem.....
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I like poetry
Take your time and write me a good one :)
I am looking forward to it
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溜口有著數喎~~~ 我我我我.... wakakakakakaka...
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adele replied at 2012-10-14 12:17 am
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If I were guy I think will start at: It come what it comes, is it need an essay? But......
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Don't take it too seriously
This is just for fun :p
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erica56 replied at 2012-10-14 1:27 am
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Sincere replied at 2012-10-14 12:20 am
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Erica,
I would like to participate the competition.
"If I have three hours with Erica, I will explore her secret little heart with my warm sweet blood, sneak a look at her eyes with my shy pupils and take a breath of her fragrance to memorize in my nose. I will be holding her hand walking on sand of a silent beach, rounding her back looking at sunset my warmth ignites her spirit. Listening to breeze touch with my finger tips to unfreeze her lonely heart. Kissing her lips reaching her deep to heal the soul. A moment of day will stay with her for days the magic three hours of romance!"
Hope you enjoy it...
[email protected]
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Comments: I like how you combined the physical actions and the mental activities. There can be improvements on grammar.
40+23+5+7=75
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erica56 replied at 2012-10-14 1:27 am
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Sincere replied at 2012-10-14 12:20 am
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Erica,
I would like to participate the competition.
"If I have three hours with Erica, I will explore her secret little heart with my warm sweet blood, sneak a look at her eyes with my shy pupils and take a breath of her fragrance to memorize in my nose. I will be holding her hand walking on sand of a silent beach, rounding her back looking at sunset my warmth ignites her spirit. Listening to breeze touch with my finger tips to unfreeze her lonely heart. Kissing her lips reaching her deep to heal the soul. A moment of day will stay with her for days the magic three hours of romance!"
Hope you enjoy it...
[email protected]
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Comments: I like how you combined the physical actions and the mental activities. There can be improvements on grammar.
40+20+5+7=
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Please kindly correct my gramma.
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最衰我係女~ 如果唔係我都想試下~
erica唔好嬲下~ 我悶悶地係你地頭99震~
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erica56 replied at 2012-10-14 12:51 am
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LovelyMandy replied at 2012-10-13 7:02 pm
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徵文比賽都幾有創意喎
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你有無興趣參加？
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我文筆差，參加會攞最低分架＞.＜
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參加者 replied at 2012-10-14 12:53 am
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版主， 請問有無貼士可以俾大家參考下呀。
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最緊要都係內容要夠充實，可以用多d修辭手法同講多d感受方面ge野，同埋要有創意，唔好千遍一律。
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ro replied at 2012-10-14 12:55 am
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我又應徵
先旨聲明,純抄襲,非二次創作
***
喉嚨很乾 所以愛上你的吻
咀巴需要覺得 像被誰期侍過
纏綿很好 所以愛上你胸襟
體溫需要記得 亦被承受過
為誰亦能動心 請不要笑我太低等
熱情自然亮燈 渴望難自禁
味蕾覓尋肉身 比一隻野獸更天真
問誰又能硬撼 肉體吸引
讓美色 給感官體諒 過程其實極漂亮
難道你在訓練我 不需要情慾對象
熱吻間 勾起的想像 愛情其實是這樣
期望你 亦要為身體著想
***
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期待你的作品
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LovelyMandy replied at 2012-10-14 1:32 am
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erica56 replied at 2012-10-14 12:51 am
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LovelyMandy replied at 2012-10-13 7:02 pm
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徵文比賽都幾有創意喎
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你有無興趣參加？
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我文筆差，參加會攞最低分架＞.＜
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毛毛參賽啦~~ 我睇好你架~~ ^^